So....

There is a whole line of storms waiting to come get us.  Mwa ha ha.

Not many people commented on my story excerpt below...for those who have the time (and of course many of you don't), even if you think it sucks, please e-mail me your thoughts!  

By the way, it's a novel for teens.  I didn't say that because I think it should still be enjoyable if you're an adult, and the editors reading it will of course be adults.  So I didn't want to hear "Well, I don't like it, but maybe if I was 17 I would."  If the writing turns you off, it'll turn off editors reading it, too.  But that's why it's about the new school year and all that.